四六级作文决胜在于创造闪光点（一）思维导图
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高分作文标志
1：120-150字；150-180字；
2、是否长短句交叉；
3、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；
4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；
下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：
1.适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(比如写结尾时不用weshouldpayattentionto而用Attentionshouldbepaidto.)举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：Itis,therefore,hightimethatsomeapplicableapproacheswereimplementedbytheserviceindustrylikethat.Thus，itscompetitiveedgewillbesharpenedeffectively.
2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
如however/therefore/forexample/Ibelieve做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
比如说：Otherindividuals,however,taketheattitudethat…
3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good,bad,many,thing,think,
people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper,approaches代替ways,implement代替carryout,sharpenone'scompetitiveedge代替enhanceone'scompetitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
下面举一篇一位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
ComputerandI
BySimmy
Ineverforgettheexceedinglythrillingdaywhenmymotherboughtmeacomputerasbirthdaypresent,whichexertedatremendousfascinationonmesothatiindulgedmyselfingooglinganarmyofusefulinformationIhadexpected,andenjoyaseaofmelodiousclassicmusic.ThatnightIwassleepless,feelingthatthewholeworldbelongedtome.
exceedingly替换very
thrilling替换exciting
sth.exertatremendousfascinationonsb替换sb.beinterestedinsth.
google替换search
anarmyof替换alotof
Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessedtheincreasingpopularityofcomputers.Coincidentwiththeadvancementofscienceandtechnology,computerspouringintothecurrentsocietyasafashionareappealingtogrowingindividuals.Itisnoexaggerationtosaywehavebeensubmergedbythem,inlargemeasure!
Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；
Increasingpopularity替换moreandmorepopular
Coincidentwith…非常地道的词汇，表达"与…一致"的意思，替换With…
Advancement替换development
Pourinto(floodinto/swarminto)替换enterinto
Current(currently)替换now
Appealtosb.替换sb.beinterestedinsth.
Growingindividuals替换moreandmorepeople
Itisnoexaggerationtosay经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的
Forastart,wecan,freely,searchdesiredinformationatanymoment.Littlebylittle,ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened.Additionally,wecangethugerecreationsonlinebychatting,playinggames,ordeliveringemail.
Forastart替换Tobeginwith
Wecan,freely,search用了插入语的写作手法
ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened.用了非常精彩的被动
Additionally替换Inaddition/Besides
Deliver替换send
Thereisnodenyingthat,however,computerscanfunctioninthedisserviceofhumanbeings,inaway,especiallythegrowingviolence,pornpictures,AV-filmsemergingonthescreen,whichleadsquietafewnetcitizenstocopying.
Thereisnodenyingthat,however,computerscanfunctioninthedisserviceofhumanbeings,这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先Thereisnodenyingthat这个句型，还有however作为插入语，functioninthedisserviceof替换doharmto
Emerging代替appearing(fading代替disappearing)
Netcitizen网民，属于精彩用词（编者：如果用netizen就完美了！）
Asaclassicproverbgoesthatnogardenhasnoweeds.Computersdoplayapositiveroleinthedevelopmentofpeople'lives,despiteasliceofunfavorableimpacts.Weshould,therefore,takeadvantageofthefruitsandavoidtheoppositefacet.
Nogardenhasnoweeds替换Everycoinhastwosides
Computersdoplay，do强调
Positive替换important/good等
Asliceof替换apartof
Unfavorable替换bad
Impacts替换effects/influences
Weshould,therefore,takeadvantageof…使用插入语
Fruits(而且fruits用的非常形象，merits/virtues)替换advantage(defects替换disadvantage)
Facet替换aspect[1][]
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