2012年12月大学英语四级写作方法:语态的隐含意义 Stylish English is ... Concise 简洁才是美 好的写作,首先而且至关重要的一点就是简洁。
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StylishEnglishis...
Concise
简洁才是美
好的写作,首先而且至关重要的一点就是简洁。繁冗的写作堆砌了许多无用的词藻,反而减弱表述的清晰度。当然,也不能仅仅因为简短就认为短句一定优于长句。只要一个单词确实能起到一定的作用,它就应该留在句中。一般来说,只有在进行强调或修饰、美化句子时,才能使用重复的单词、语音和短语。修改文章,就是要删繁就简。比较下面这对句子,注意体会二者的差别及效果。
1)Dr.SunYat-senwenttoJapanbymeansofabigboat.
斜体字部分较啰嗦,因为"by"就是"bymeansofboat"。
请看下列例句
Wordy:Itmakesmefeelpainfultothinkthatshehastowork12hoursadayandsevendaysaweek.
Better:Itpainsmetothinkthatshehastowork12hoursadayandsevendaysaweek.
Wordy:ItwillbeouraimtoensureproperhealthcareforeachandeveryoneoftheChinesepeople.
Better:OuraimistoensureproperhealthcareforallChinese.
Wordy:Thisbookwillhelpyoumasterthebasicelementsofgoodwriting.
Better:Thisbookwillhelpyoumasterthebasicsofgoodwriting.
Wordy:Thesearchoftheforestthattheyconductedwasentirelycomplete.
Better:Thesearchoftheforestwascomplete.
或Theyconductedacompletesearchoftheforest.
第二个句子合乎汉语表达习惯,即他们对森林进行了彻底的搜查。
Wordy:Hehasnosenseofprinciples,whetherheisinpublicorinprivate.
Better:Hehasnoprinciples,publicorprivate.
Wordy:Wheneveranyonetelephonedhertoaskherforhelpwiththeirhomeworkshealwaysobligedrightaway.
Better:Sheimmediatelyobligedanyonewhotelephonedforhelpwithhomework.
Wordy:Inacautiousmannerthecarwentaroundthecorner.
Better:Thecarnegotiatedthecorner.
Wordy:Ifthegovernmentagencyfindsthatanindividualhasreceivedapaymenttowhichtheindividualwasnotentitled,whetherornotthepaymentwasduetotheindividual’sfaultormisrepresentation,theindividualshallbeliabletorepaytothegovernmentthetotalsumofthepaymenttowhichtheindividualwasnotentitled.
Better:Ifthegovernmentagencyfindsthatyoureceivedapaymentthatyouweren’tentitledto,youmustpaytheentiresumback.
Wordy:Anotherimportantaspectisgoodhealth.Itisoneofourgreatblessings.Itmaybeachievedthroughproperdietandexercise.Restisalsodesirable.
Better:Thegreatblessingofgoodhealthmaybehadthroughproperdiet,exercise,andrest.